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I wish you were Earth - 3 of 5 by ~Bladegrasp:iconBladegrasp:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Romantic > Teen or Young Romance > Open


I wish you were here,
I wish you were stone,
Your worth immeasurable by gold…

And though there may be many diamonds shining bright from heartfelt rings,
None would refract the light and hopes of my soul like you,
Because the delightful mineral composition of your body cannot be matched,
And no cut will fit you best than the one by the side of your dress,
Revealing the crystal clear reflection of my desires by the heartbeat of your every step…
©2008-2009 ~Bladegrasp
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Author's Comments

”Elemental Love” Collection:

I wish you were Wind: [link]
I wish you were Water: [link]
I wish you were Earth: [link]
I wish you were Fire: [link]
I wish you were Music: [link]

All five pieces possess their own tone and message; therefore I would have failed them if I would have made them into a single poem.

“Elemental Love” is a very dear Collection for me. Even though it’s Open Poetry, it carries a level of format I desired to sustain through the whole Collection:

8-Line Pieces
4th line begins with “And though”, completely twisting the thoughts of the preceding lines.
The Elemental references are not repeated throughout the whole Collection.


Please leave behind your comments and thoughts. I’ll hold you in my highest regard for your time and attention~



Very Respectfully,

~Bladegrasp

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~Sweetly-Sacrificed May 11, 2008, 5:51:15 PM
Oh wow it's been a long time since I've come across such a heart filled poem. And, not to mention, one that is not based soley on pain either, or rvenge...just on true (positive) feelings. This is quite refreshing, and made me feel good.
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~Bladegrasp May 11, 2008, 6:11:54 PM
I'm honored by your observation~!

And yes, there are so many poets writing so much sadness these days... What happened to heartfelt emotions?

If you like this kind of poems, take a look at my dream shoppe~ There's something for everyone in there!

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See you've got to fall in love and marry a woman who combats your overwhelming love with her own by coming up with new ways to make -you- happy! Doesn't that make sense? Then when you go crazy, you go crazy together...crazy in love...

~Cyre
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*cyre May 11, 2008, 7:19:39 PM
"Revealing the crystal clear reflection of my desires by the heartbeat of your every step…"

Thats my favorite line. Its so very fluid and graceful, I love the poise that seems to personify itself by this piece.

Great work!

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"To Dream by Day is to be cognizant of many things which escape those who merely dream by night"
-Poe
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=mythicaldamienne May 11, 2008, 7:30:49 PM
:rose:

I can't think of words good enough to share my heart on this piece.

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To achieve the marvelous, it is precisely the unthinkable that must be thought.
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~Bladegrasp May 11, 2008, 7:30:58 PM
Thats so weird! That was the line that came out pretty much by itself out of my pen~!

I was really proud of "Earth" although I don't know but it may be the weakest of the whole collection. I am sure "Fire" is a stronger poem at least.

That line though, all other elements envy it!

--
See you've got to fall in love and marry a woman who combats your overwhelming love with her own by coming up with new ways to make -you- happy! Doesn't that make sense? Then when you go crazy, you go crazy together...crazy in love...

~Cyre
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*cyre May 11, 2008, 7:37:07 PM
They're all beautiful! They all compliment each other, building and sharing the light, I don't know what to say, I can't express to you how much I love all of them, but I think you know.

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"To Dream by Day is to be cognizant of many things which escape those who merely dream by night"
-Poe
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~Bladegrasp May 11, 2008, 8:05:52 PM
><! You are killing me :no:

Thanks so much for your inputs and such faithful dedication to every piece i've been posting lately! You rock~

--
See you've got to fall in love and marry a woman who combats your overwhelming love with her own by coming up with new ways to make -you- happy! Doesn't that make sense? Then when you go crazy, you go crazy together...crazy in love...

~Cyre
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~Bladegrasp May 11, 2008, 8:25:36 PM
I think I have an idea...

As much as I loved writing them, so full of 'hope' for someone to like them this much~

--
See you've got to fall in love and marry a woman who combats your overwhelming love with her own by coming up with new ways to make -you- happy! Doesn't that make sense? Then when you go crazy, you go crazy together...crazy in love...

~Cyre
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*cyre May 11, 2008, 8:31:13 PM
Well...:)

I most certainly hope whoever you wrote them for enjoyed them as much as you hoped they would.

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"To Dream by Day is to be cognizant of many things which escape those who merely dream by night"
-Poe
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