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I wish you were Wind - 1 of 5 by ~Bladegrasp:iconBladegrasp:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Romantic > Teen or Young Romance > Open


I wish you were here,
I wish you were wind,
My heart without you tragically malingering satisfaction…

And though the days to come will try to cloud my thoughts of you,
Our moonlit memories will clear my skies in reminiscence,
Until the sunrise of your name brings forth your breeze through the trees,
Moving through this forest of dreamers ever so gracefully,
Just to find me longing, awaiting your dew in whispers through my leaves…
©2008-2009 ~Bladegrasp
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Author's Comments

”Elemental Love” Collection:

I wish you were Wind: [link]
I wish you were Water: [link]
I wish you were Earth: [link]
I wish you were Fire: [link]
I wish you were Music: [link]

All five pieces possess their own tone and message; therefore I would have failed them if I would have made them into a single poem.

“Elemental Love” is a very dear Collection for me. Even though it’s Open Poetry, it carries a level of format I desired to sustain through the whole Collection:

8-Line Pieces
4th line begins with “And though”, completely twisting the thoughts of the preceding lines.
The Elemental references are not repeated throughout the whole Collection.


Please leave behind your comments and thoughts. I’ll hold you in my highest regard for your time and attention~



Very Respectfully,

~Bladegrasp

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*cyre May 11, 2008, 7:10:02 PM
Complex, beautifully so. Wow, this is intensely amazing. I love this, very very good work, you should be proud of yourself.

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"To Dream by Day is to be cognizant of many things which escape those who merely dream by night"
-Poe
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~Bladegrasp May 11, 2008, 7:26:24 PM
:hug:

Be quiet now ><!

Thanks for all your support and inspiration, you're fantastic~!

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See you've got to fall in love and marry a woman who combats your overwhelming love with her own by coming up with new ways to make -you- happy! Doesn't that make sense? Then when you go crazy, you go crazy together...crazy in love...

~Cyre
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=mythicaldamienne May 11, 2008, 7:27:05 PM
Very deep, and extremely tender. I found myself swaying while reading it aloud. It really flows well....

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To achieve the marvelous, it is precisely the unthinkable that must be thought.
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*cyre May 11, 2008, 7:30:29 PM
Why do I have to be quiet? Am I in trouble?

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"To Dream by Day is to be cognizant of many things which escape those who merely dream by night"
-Poe
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~Bladegrasp May 11, 2008, 7:42:05 PM
"Wind" was the opening call for the collection. It has to be just enough and not enough at the same time. Just enough power to keep you reading through, but not enough content to give up all the passion~

"Wind" is a call for love~

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See you've got to fall in love and marry a woman who combats your overwhelming love with her own by coming up with new ways to make -you- happy! Doesn't that make sense? Then when you go crazy, you go crazy together...crazy in love...

~Cyre
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~Bladegrasp May 11, 2008, 8:04:18 PM
:slap:

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See you've got to fall in love and marry a woman who combats your overwhelming love with her own by coming up with new ways to make -you- happy! Doesn't that make sense? Then when you go crazy, you go crazy together...crazy in love...

~Cyre
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*cyre May 11, 2008, 8:05:15 PM
I guess I did get into trouble...*hangs head*

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"To Dream by Day is to be cognizant of many things which escape those who merely dream by night"
-Poe
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~NINTheFragile May 11, 2008, 8:09:12 PM
The sunrise of your name....
Didn't really like that because it doesn't blend but the next line is perfect and made me forget.... very well written

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"Feel the breath slip away from the lung and let life fly away on its broken wings"
-NINTheFragile-
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~Bladegrasp May 11, 2008, 8:46:47 PM
By sunrise I wanted to present a peaceful morning of summer, bringing forth the strenght to build on the forest part.

I feel that during sunrise is where the wind is most beautiful to feel. You can smell the dew all over while being able to see your surroundings and see what the wind brought during a night's worth of life~

Additionally, if the sun wasn't behind the trees, would it really be mesmerizing for the breeze to shake their leaves and play with the sunlight at will? Thats the power of wind in my opinion~

Not trying to justify at all though, I do see your point. But instead just stating my thought process~ Maybe it helps you see my imagery better now that you know if you read it one more time~

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See you've got to fall in love and marry a woman who combats your overwhelming love with her own by coming up with new ways to make -you- happy! Doesn't that make sense? Then when you go crazy, you go crazy together...crazy in love...

~Cyre
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